The revising of a revision

Of my choices two choices of revision I will be choosing essay #2. Essay number two was chose because it is easier to critique someone's work than it is to make a work to your standards of judgement. Even my second revision of essay 2 had many short comings and could be vastly improved, both in content and format. The newest revision will focus primarily on including more data in the pamphlet style design as well as using color schema to make the flow easier to follow.